Writing Task 2: Essay (1)

1st paragraph

1st variaton
Throughout this century, the role of … has increased considerably and the majority of people feel that this change is for better. … Nonetheless, in my opinion there is still a great deal of …

2nd variaton
… is an issue which frequently generates a great deal of heated debate with supporters maintaining that it is … in order to (protect) …, whilst opponents claim that it is … This question from my point of view is a controversial one. In the following paragraphs I will analyze both of these options and present my opinion.

2nd paragraph
The first thing that should be noted is that …
The main reason for this is that there are/is …
Obviously that …
As a result …

3rd paragraph
Secondly, it is a well-known fact that …
For instance …
So therefore …

4th paragraph
In addition to this information it should also be stressed that …
On condition that …
It can be illustrated by …
If earlier was only positive or negative
However , there is more than one way of looking at this problem.
In contrast, there are …

5th paragraph
Taking all this points into consideration I would say that …
I think, that the best course of action would be to attempt to achieve a balance between the … on the one hand and … on the other.

You can reduce amount of paragraphs down to 4.
Dont't use contracted forms like I haven't. Always write a full form as I have not.